When Rama was just a young boy he used to dream of a day
when he would be strong enough adventure into the jungle with his bow and arrow
by his side. He would run around his house with a play bow and arrow and shoot
it at bales of hay. When he grew up he took his childhood dream with him and
practiced shooting arrows into a target until his arms gave out. Rama was a
handsome man that ever girl in the country would find themselves lucky to be with
him especially since he was the Kings eldest son. He never found interest in
any of them until one day he came across a girl named Sita. She was elegant, beautiful,
and fond of him too.
While
dating Rama and Sita were inseparable and everyone in their families loved them
except Ravana, Sita's Uncle. When Ravana found out about his niece relationship
he put a curse on Rama which forced him into exile in the jungle. When Sita
found out she ask Lakshama, Rama's younger brother, to help her find him. They
took Rama's bow and arrow and journeyed into the jungle.
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| Rama, Sita, and Lakshama Source: Wikimedia |
Once
they had found Rama they decided to stay with him in the jungle. Lakshama was a
good brother and refused to leave his brother alone in exiled and Sita loved
him too much to leave his side. They set up a camp in the middle of the jungle
where they lived for a long time. Each day Lakshama and Rama would adventure
through the jungle to hunt for food. Rama enjoyed his time with his family and
also was happy to fulfill his childhood dream of adventuring through the
jungle.
When
Ravana decided to check on his exiled hostage he found that he was not a
miserable hostage at all. He spied on their camp for several days and after the
third day he made a plan. Once the brothers had gone out to hunt we would
capture Sita and take her away. The next morning he followed through with his
plan. When the two brothers got back from their hunt Rama searched in a panic
to find Sita. When he couldn’t find her he ran off into the trees to morn for
his lost love when he found a sage that stopped him in his tracks. The sage
told him of what had happened and the trials and tribulations that were ahead of
him but Rama did not care about the hardships because he knew he had to get
Sita back.
Rama ran
back to the camp site to tell Lakshama the news about Sita. Rama then made a
plan for them to go through the jungle to find Sita. Rama knew that Ravana
would have set traps and sent demons to stop him but he was prepared. In his
bag he carried a golden bow that the sage had given him and in his heart he carried
love.
To be continued…
Authors Note: For this story I used the real names of the
characters from Ramayana and all the relationships between the characters are
also true to the original story except that Ravana is not Sita's uncle but
instead a nemesis of Rama's. The golden bow in the story comes from the golden
sandals in the original which was a symbol of Rama. Another part of the story
true to the original was the capture of Sita. Rama was truly exiled by his stepmother
but in the story I combine the stepmother's character with Ravana. The rest of
the story is my own imagination.
Sara, I really enjoyed reading your story about Rama’s exile to the forest. Wow on what you came up with because it utilized the characters from the Ramayana, however, it created a twist with Ravana and Rama being related. Furthermore, I enjoyed that it was Ravana himself that exiled Rama instead of Kaikeyi. I do like that the sage had given Rama the bow that he would use in his efforts to return Sita. I wonder though if adding the golden deer would have helped create a more tense aspect when Ravana kidnapped Sita. I feel it could have been interesting to have Sita, Rama, and Lakshama return from exile and fight Ravana. I do know that you said to be continued so maybe that could be something you can add when you finish the story. Overall though, I really enjoyed reading this story filled with twists and excitement.
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Sara! This is a small world! Calc was a while ago I hope you are doing well! First off I really like your story! In fact I also created a story about Rama’s exile, except I went far off the path. I really like your cliffhanger at the end. I like how you changed up the exile and had the “bad guys” come into play and kidnapped Sita. What I did with by story was kept some of the concepts from the Ramayana but I change the scene and characters. I think in the future you should try something like that, it is super fun to right and it feels more like your own story instead of just the Ramayana with a few twists. Also, it was kind of sudden how the villain found Rama and the others so quickly, maybe have some way of explaining how he found them. Overall, awesome story Sara! I look forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteHi Sara. I found your story to be unexpected which made it enjoyable to read. I would not have thought to have both Ravana and Sita related, very creative. I like that you switched up the roles of the characters in comparison to the original tale. I loved, and I mean loved the ending line " In his bag he carried a golden bow that the sage had given him and in his heart he carried love." I pictured Rama standing back straight, looking forward with a face full of determination. You made me wonder what Rama will face next. Great story!
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